tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6902026.post112612940026373544..comments2023-07-16T02:28:41.444-07:00Comments on The Proving Ground: City of Mages: Chapter IIINathaniel Cornstalkhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05784953716180250232noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6902026.post-1126145426049772372005-09-07T19:10:00.000-07:002005-09-07T19:10:00.000-07:00yea about the typos, but I've said that before any...yea about the typos, but I've said that before anyway.<BR/><BR/>I like the way the story is building. My only (possible) suggestion for this chapter would be to add more about what going on in the pirate's mind while on he's talking to Lady Celia, but its not really a big thing. Other than that I lvoe this whole thing about 'who's gonna be the next Xindor and do we need one anyway'.<BR/><BR/>Keep up the good work! I love it!Eveyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07764961738219048915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6902026.post-1126135533517244202005-09-07T16:25:00.000-07:002005-09-07T16:25:00.000-07:00Good chapter-- your characters and plotlines are s...Good chapter-- your characters and plotlines are still strong and getting stronger. I'm particularly intruiged by what Lady Cecilia has in mind now. But I'd suggest watching more carefully for typos and such. It's distracting.Erinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07998763082812999453noreply@blogger.com